First Place Twenty-five Points
lightning
an owl in the elm
...not in the elm
Melissa Spurr
(3,4,8) = 25 Pts
Wow! Perfect visual!
in the glow
of the red maple
autumn's end
Roberta Beary
(2,5,9) = 25 Pts
Second Place Twenty-three Points
acorn cap
sometimes all I know
is emptiness
John Thompson
(1,4,12) = 23 Pts
Appealingly small and sweetly poignant.
Third Place Twenty-one Points
wet snow
another year weighs
on the century oak
tom painting
(1,5,8) = 21 Pts
Fourth Place Twenty Points
pine fence
the tiny spider
mends a knothole
RaV
(0,4,12) = 20 Pts
This had, for me, that satisfying "of course" feeling... such a natural pairing, spiders and knotholes.
Fifth Place Seventeen Points
Hiroshima . . .
an autumn gingko
blurred by tears
Beverley George
(2,3,5) = 17 Pts
Extremely powerful and full of emotion.
abandoned house
on the mulberry tree
a cicada shell
Sheri Files
(1,1,12) = 17 Pts
I liked how this played with my mind's expectations... I was thinking the house was going to be on a hill or street, so the tree was a nice surprise.
Sixth Place Sixteen Points
platano tree
every leaf falling
in its own way
Tomislav M.
(1,3,7) = 16 Pts
Seventh Place Fifteen Points
an oak falls
the old man's song
goes on
Rita Odeh
(1,3,6) = 15 Pts
Eighth Place Fourteen Points
acorns
the tree my
father planted
Robert Ertman
(1,0,11) = 14 Pts
Ninth Place Thirteen Points
hard frost
the old oak's branches
cage the full moon
Catherine J.S. Lee
(1,2,6) = 13 Pts
This is perfectly executed; great imagery and word choice.
days of rain
the willow loses
its reflection
polona
(1,1,8) = 13 Pts
Tenth Place Twelve Points
Oak grove
in the space between daydreams
an acorn falls
Kilah C.
(0,1,10) = 12 Pts
Reality will intrude.
birdless oak
I listen to the song
of a winter wind
Collin Barber
(0,1,10) = 12 Pts
I like the "water mind" aspect of this... moving from listening to what used to be there ("should") to what actually IS there.
Eleventh Place Ten Points
first snow
silence among
the aspens
jt
(0,2,6) = 10 Pts
Twelfth Place Eight Points
all saints
only oaks
around the tomb
Wojciech Wojnar
(1,2,1) = 8 Pts
all hallows eve
the ghost face
in half a walnut shell
Francine Banwarth
(1,1,3) = 8 Pts
persistent
under the morning frost
the smell of pines
Dejan Pavlinovic
(0,2,4) = 8 Pts
autumn wind
between oak branches
a lone star
Israel Lopez Balan
(0,1,6) = 8 Pts
Thirteenth Place Seven Points
In our home
both the moon and stars...
the Christmas Tree
Vasile Moldovan
(1,2,0) = 7 Pts
It happened that
my apricot tree to blossom
just on your birthday
Adina Enachescu
(1,2,0) = 7 Pts
autumn moon
kneeling under the pine
one shadow to another
tori inu
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts
Fourteenth Place Six Points
gentle rain at dusk
drips softly from cedar trees
missing my father
Bridget Cougar
(1,1,1) = 6 Pts
A lime tree
at my window pane...
sere leaves
Magdalena Dale
(0,3,0) = 6 Pts
evening star
the last poplar leaves
still rustling
Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts
snow melt
beneath the maple
leaf after leaf
Susan Constable
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts
Japanese maple
through brilliant leaves and rain,
that black trunk!
Shelley Krause
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts
cold dawn
bare oak limbs reach
for the sun
Nancy Nitrio
(0,1,4) = 6 Pts
Fifteenth Place Five Points
standing tall
poplars and willows
breaking wind
carol bleicher
(0,2,1) = 5 Pts
The juxtaposition of utilitarian function with cultural humor is particularly interesting. What it lacks in subtlety, it regains in imagery.
an old man prunes
the olive trees branches
no peace here
Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,2,1) = 5 Pts
a haiku
on her oak desk
autumn leaves
Mary Davila
(0,2,1) = 5 Pts
piano class
even an old oak rustles
in mazurka rhythm
Jacek M.
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts
Good one - the spirit of the trees catches the vibe!
visiting home
daddy's memorial oak
now shades the house
Hazel A. Witherspoon
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts
Sixteenth Place Four Points
cherry leaves
falling on the red currant shrub
the first white frost
Miorita
(1,0,1) = 4 Pts
the widow's oak
holding a leaf
Christmas evening
Dan Schwerin
(1,0,1) = 4 Pts
weeping willow
even my eyes
get moist
Katarzyna Predota
(0,2,0) = 4 Pts
dried oak leaves
swirl like ribbons
in the wind
fedelmia
(0,2,0) = 4 Pts
A vivid image musically rendered. An example of 'rule breaking' which works excellently well (one sentence rule & don't use 'like'.
waving in the wind
from the bough the of pine
the spiders banner
Bill Hudson
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
cold north wind
the willows
bent backwards
John Stone
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
indian summer
she leads me behind
the old bare cottonwood
Mike Montreuil
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
Missa solemnis.
Imagining maple trees
in autumn colors.
Horst Ludwig
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
serenade
west wind strums
the silver birch
Frances McCarthy
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
black walnut tree
bumper crop of nuts
and squirrels
deanna tief
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
a willow
sprouts in my garden
unbidden
terrytip
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts
autumn ginkgo
pieces of sunlight flying off
in the breeze
Audrey Downey
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts
nightfall
in the twisted walnut branches
a thin-curved moon
Elena
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts
last light
through last leaves
old cottonwood
Ann K. Schwader
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts
birds singing
on a pepper tree
a hot day
Judy Muthengi
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts
Seventeenth Place Three Points
a cold clear day
the yellow leaves spread out
from the last maple
Bruce Ross
(0,1,1)= 3 Pts
recess:
by the royal empress tree
he gets a quick kiss
Raquel D. Bailey
(0,1,1)= 3 Pts
playing peek-a-boo
among the banyan roots
November moon
Josh Wikoff
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
years since
I've heard those words
bittersweet winds up the oak
Joyce Clement
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
I see you possum
climbing my persimmon tree!
I have the ripe fruit.
Rose Marie Stutts
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
Hunter's Moon
oak leaves lace
the gutter
aom (tim)
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
stained hands
a squirrel feasts
under my walnut tree
Daniela Bullas
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
open field
a threadbare oak
leans into the wind
todd eddy
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
burr oak
the old horse stays in the shade
pestered by flies
Edward
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
oak sapling
its few leaves
turned to gold
Garry Eaton
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
a strip of pink
beyond the bare Linden tree
day breaks
Marylouise Knight
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
little china
the sliced bamboo shoots
in my clear soup
kala ramesh
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
Something so satisfyingly simple here... with a nod towards the futility of possession.
General Comments:
I found that this month's topic seemed rather difficult for many poets to address without getting sentimental or clichιd.