First Place Forty-three Points
sleepless night
the moon shifts
from pane to pane
Janice Hornburg
(2,8,21) = 43 Pts
And from pain to pain...I'm having nights like that.
I really love the implied association with the homophone, 'pain.' This is a lovely haiku.
Second Place Twenty-eight Points
moonless night
the wind whistles into
an empty bottle
Tanya Dikova
(2,7,8) = 28 Pts
I feel the length and loneliness of the night in this.
It seems that the bottle here, beyond being just 'empty,' becomes a vessel that holds the vast and infinite emptiness of nighttime. Well done.
Ooh, nice one. Has a very classic feel.
Truly evocative: Night, the wind, the world in a bottle. Empty? Hardly.
The implications of this one are sad and lonely but very effectively expressed.
night
settles on the city
starling by starling
Kilah C
(1,7,11) = 28 Pts
Yes! That's just the way it happens!
I really like this quiet imagery. Original and effective.
Third Place Twenty-five Points
the night splits
into before and after
the phone call
Barbara Snow
(1,4,14) = 25 Pts
Certain phone calls will do that. I like the tension that runs through this poem, from the first line to the last.
Fourth Place Twenty-three Points
moonless night
the jasmine's fragrance
leads me home
Jacek M.
(0,7,9) = 23 Pts
Fifth Place Sixteen Points
silent night
the child moves
inside her
Josh Wikoff
(0,3,10) = 16 Pts
The seasonal reference has real force because it is so simple and yet radiant with meanings.
Sixth Place Fifteen Points
stars
long after the death
of a bonfire
Collin Barber
(0,4,7) = 15 Pts
Seventh Place Thirteen Points
the rain that stopped
has started again . . .
the long night
Bill Kenney
(2,2,3) = 13 Pts
Such loneliness in so few syllables.
winter night, another long train slowly passes
Laurene Post
(0,2,9) = 13 Pts
The form compliments this one nicely.
The one-line format fits very well here. Wonderful!
Great simplicity, symmetry, and chemistry between the two things juxtaposed.
Eighth Place Twelve Points
between street lamps
the rise and fall
of my shadow
Agnes Eva Savich
(0,1,10) = 12 Pts
A rhythmic, wave-like effect to this progression as one lamp releases the tall shadow to the next, then the shadow shrinks as it nears each lamp only to grow again. Energy and even moods are also rather like this. Very evocative.
Ninth Place Eleven Points
cold night . . .
submerging cabbage hearts
in the soup pot
Michael McClintock
(0,2,7) = 11 Pts
Tenth Place Ten Points
howl of a dog
empties the night
of silence
Michelle V. Alkerton
(0,2,6) = 10 Pts
rainy night
with every step
moon under my feet
Katarzyna Predota
(0,1,8) = 10 Pts
Eleventh Place Nine Points
goodnight kiss
he takes
his time
Roberta Beary
(0,3,3) = 9 Pts
Slight, perhaps, but well-crafted, with an eloquent (and elegant) break at the end of line 2.
my secret crush
our shadows touch
in the moonlight
Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,2,5) = 9 Pts
That's really sweet!
moonless night
her face in the glow
of the cellphone screen
Mykel Board
(0,2,5) = 9 Pts
A well-written 21st century haiku.
A nice surprise as well as a reflection (a punning image!)
Contrasts the depth of a night's darkness in a fresh way.
Twelfth Place Eight Points
2 a.m.
barefoot at the window
watching the snow
April Serock
(0,2,4) = 8 Pts
long night
my eyes strain
the personals
tom painting
(0,1,6) = 8 Pts
nightfall
mountains near and far
become one
Melissa Spurr
(0,1,6) = 8 Pts
stillness
the night after
he left for war
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,1,6) = 8 Pts
Thirteenth Place Seven Points
imagine a haiku written
28 years ago this night
John Lennon's death
1bodhisattva
(2,0,1) = 7 Pts
night in the valley
I follow
the shepherd's call
Gosia Zamorska
(1,1,2) = 7 Pts
silent night
the holiness of trees
in wet snow
George Hawkins
(1,0,4) = 7 Pts
moonless night
all shadows
disappeared
Derwisz
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts
first snowfall
newborn sleeps through
the night
Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,5) = 7 Pts
I remember that first night. Unfortunately, I still laid awake . . . listening.
I love the comfort the blanket of snow brings.
Fourteenth Place Six Points
longest night
the Pleiades unwind
their string of lights
Shelley Krause
(1,1,1) = 6 Pts
A nice winter sky image.
a snowy owl
cries from the cedars ...
the night deepens
Bridget Cougar
(0,1,4) = 6 Pts
wake
how he'd talk
of the stars above the foxhole
aom (tim)
(0,1,4) = 6 Pts
winter night
the harbour light blinks
across the ice
Beth Powell
(0,0,6) = 6 Pts
autumn night
only the rustle of leaves
of an old novel
Dorota Pyra
(0,0,6) = 6 Pts
Fifteenth Place Five Points
Quite alone
wandering through the polar night...
the lodestar
Vasile Moldovan
(1,0,2) = 5 Pts
the old furnace
creaks and groans
comforting bumps in the night
Bill Hudson
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts
A comforting sound on a cold winter's night.
autumn leaves
the last bus departs
almost empty
Israel Lopez Balan
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts
The gap between the set-up (line 1) and payoff (lines 2-3) leaves the reader just enough to do.
drizzly night
tiny stars dance
on my glasses
Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts
the long night
regular start/stop
of the fridge motor
if
(0,0,5) = 5 Pts
3 a.m.
last night the silence
tonight the rain
Kate Creighton
(0,0,5) = 5 Pts
Sixteenth Place Four Points
steep canyon walls
with each rumble of thunder
the night feels longer
Edward
(0,2,0) = 4 Pts
spring night
frogs outshine
the stars
John Soules
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
his words linger
all night the patter of rain
on the window
polona
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
embracing father
for the final time
old moon in the new moon's arms
jon davey
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
city night
last-minute shoppers jostle
the homeless man's cart
Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
A sad commentary. What is Christmas without charity and compassion for our fellow man?
And I read "cart" as "shopping cart." Why say everything?
arguing
again
long
cold
night
Sjs
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts
Seventeenth Place Three Points
heading to work
a raccoon's brief shadow
under the old moon
Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,0) = 3 Pts
Holy Night...
twinkling stars nestled
among the branches
Dejan Pavlinovic
(1,0,0) = 3 Pts
o this night!
no moon no stars
up three times to pee
miriam chaikin
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
all night
I play hide-and-seek
with the full moon
Audrey Downey
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
counting stars . . .
huddled close, bundled up
against the night
Carol Raisfeld
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
their first night
behind a veil of clouds
the smiling moon
Gryta Wansdronk
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
winter solstice
sparks fly from the fire
towards the stars
Daniela Bullas
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
Lovely image of the sparks and the stars together -- warmth and cold, movement and stillness -- this haiku immediately caught my eye!
lovers moon
venus and jupiter tryst
at twilight
Darrell Byrd
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
moonlight in Ohio
a frog has leapt
from Basho's hand
Earl Keener
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
final descent . . .
a hill temple lights-up
the night sky
kala ramesh
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
night...
the door closes in
on a moth
Nana Fredua-Agyeman
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
out of
the deep night
first snow
Marylouise Knight
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
cold night
I cover with my body
my shadow
Lech Szeglowski
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
under a blanket
grandma's winter tales
warm the long nights
frederick gier
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
funnier
than Letterman
midnight mockingbird
Joyce Clement
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
Nature's entertainment triumphs! I like the unexpected subject matter.
night game
a long line of sad football fans
walking home
Dominic Riendeau-Krause
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
shyly undressing
its always night
on the abyssal plains
A.M. Scarpone
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
late night calm
my shadow wonders through
the empty streets
Elena Naskova
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
a dark night
one or two lights shining somewhere
through the rain
Garry Eaton
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
parent-teacher conference
a halo around
the moon
Deborah P Kolodji
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
her skirt
shorter than her boots
night out
Susan Constable
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
deep frost
the feral kittens
curl into the night
jill
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
the moon
straight up
night chaser
Lin Geary
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
Clever!
General Comments:
There were so many good poems; this was a very difficult choice.
'The Night' seems to have been a very evocative choice of key words, stirring the participants to some very good haiku.