First Place -- 47 Points
early spring
all night the pond ice
shifts its weight
tom painting
(6,8,13) = 47
The first contractions have just begun to be felt, but the groaning and heaving, the struggle and drama of full-blown labour are yet to come. How quietly and precisely the poet has pinpointed the exact time (this night) and place (the depths of this pond) of spring's beginning.
For me, this really captures the season. Love the sounds, movement, and emotion it evokes.
Second Place -- 30 Points
early spring
green at the heart
of an onion
j cully
(2,6,12) = 30
Onions? Of course, of course.
The humble onion, though having been taken far from its home in the earth, nevertheless hears the call of Mother Nature and faithfully responds in its little "heart"! The use of the word "heart" in an unsentimental way expands the dimensions of the haiku brilliantly.
Third Place -- 24 Points
early spring
her wrinkled fingers
sort seed packets
Yositaka
(1,1,19) = 24
Fourth Place – 21 Points
early spring
the hatless
scarecrow
Lech Szeglowski
(0,3,15) = 21
Brings a smile. Even the scarecrow senses warmer weather!
Fifth Place -- 19 Points
early spring the crossing guard's smile
w. f. owen
(1,4,8) = 19
No more standing out in the dreary cold for kids keeping their heads
buried in collars - both may bloom with smiles.
Such an elegant haiku - a story made out of six plain words and containing great mystery and drama. From where to where is the crossing? Who is crossing? Why? We come to see that the "crossing" in the poem is the moment at which the guard undergoes a "conversion", within himself, from winter to spring. We are led to feel the power of nature's rhythms and the responsive power of hearts. Six-word poems don't come any more power-packed than this!
early spring —
fresh twigs line
an old nest
Melissa Spurr
(0,3,13) = 19
"ever-returning spring," concisely and concretely caught.
Sixth Place -- 15 Points
a stray dog
going my way
early spring
Bill Kenney
(1,3,6) = 15
A lovely carefree feeling to this haiku, which goes so well with
the season. Full of deep simplicity.
Seventh Place -- 12 Points
the sound of water
as you move through it
early spring
Josh Wikoff
(1,2,5) = 12
I can both hear and feel this... nicely done.
Eighth Place -- 11 Points
the soil splits
above a daffodil
early spring
gourdman
(0,3,5) = 11
early spring
we try to grow
a little apart
George Hawkins
(1,3,2) = 11
A poignant haiku. The season of rejuvenation also brings its own sorrow.
early spring
the butcher
wears a daffodil
Helen Buckingham
(0,3,5) = 11
february
winter turns into spring
and back
max verhart
(1,1,6) = 11
early spring
a fresh crop of rocks
in the vegetable garden
Jim Swift
(0,2,7) = 11
Ninth Place -- 10 Points
early spring…
my heart too
is thawing
john tiong chunghoo
(1,1,5) = 10
my daughter's
first valentine
~ early Spring
Paul Hodder
(1,1,5) = 10
Tenth Place -- 9 Points
early spring
my sightless cat sniffs
a remembered path
Barbara Snow
(1,2,2) = 9
rinsing celery
from rib to heart
early spring
Joyce Clement
(0,1,7) = 9
Eleventh Place -- 8 Points
fawn's footprints
circle snowdrops
early spring
Harvey Jenkins
(0,2,4) = 8
early spring
the wind-chime and icicle
drip… in unison
Terra Martin
(0,3,2) = 8
early spring . . .
the frayed swing rope
feathered with frost
Ron Moss
(0,1,6) = 8
the weeds get a head start early spring
the weeds
get a head start
early spring
Susan Constable
(1,0,5) = 8
I prefer the one-breath format.
early spring breeze
the clothesline all in
baby shirts
Petar Tchouhov
(0,2,4) = 8
frost
cradled in the crocuses~
early spring
Kate Creighton
(0,2,4) = 8
Twelfth Place -- 7 Points
A fly
wakes suddenly?
early spring
Vasile Moldovan
(1,1,2) = 7
girl in pink
dangling from the monkey bars —
early spring
CPW
(0,0,7) = 7
I much like blossoms from bare boughs.
"dangling" gets it just right.
Very visual -- love the "pink", "dangling", "monkey" --
beautifully expressed.
early spring —
squirrels run in circles
around the stop sign
Marylouise Knight
(0,1,5) = 7
passing me
her perfume
early spring
Neil Muscott
(0,2,3) = 7
Pleasure, heightened by transience.
early spring
another handwriting
in my signature
Jerzy
(0,2,3) = 7
plum blossoms
stuck in my hair ~
early spring
Keith A. Simmonds
(0,2,3) = 7
Thirteenth Place -- 6 Points
early spring
branches breathe
with the wind
Agnes Eva Savich
(0,2,2) = 6
I find this a rather curious haiku and actually aren't entirely sure
what it mean in real life. Still somehow it seems true that branches,
seemingly dead in winter, begin to breathe as their leaf buds begin to swell
in spring, while dead boughs, being stiffer, do not.
thwacks
from the sandlot
early spring
Alice Frampton
(0,1,4) = 6
early spring
a vase of pussy willows
on the kitchen table
Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,0,6) = 6
Rubber boots
caked with
early spring
Elaine Fields
(0,2,2) = 6
raindrops
surf the windshield
early spring
ruthanne
(0,1,4) = 6
early spring
kites in the sky
adding colors
kala ramesh
(0,2,2) = 6
early spring ~
a sudden softness
in my wooden flute
Li Ree
(0,1,4) = 6
early spring garden
in the earthen pot's bottom
a dead butterfly
Dorota Pyra
(1,1,1) = 6
early spring —
morning papers now
makeshift umbrellas
Shelley
(1,1,1) = 6
Vivid and original.
Fourteenth Place -- 5 Points
early spring —
red noses bloom
all across campus
Laurene
(0,1,3) = 5
early spring thaw
places where the dog went
all over the yard
andrea
(0,1,3) = 5
Ok, I admit it, my first thought was of paw prints. I like it that
multiple (mis)readings of this are possible.
early spring
only snow in the trees
blossoming
rob scott
(0,1,3) = 5
early spring sun?
sound of his voice
is still cold
Vanja Nikovic
(0,1,3) = 5
early spring —
the blackbird's first song
still short
Tom M.
(0,1,3) = 5
the smell of mud
from the half frozen creek
early spring
DeVar
(0,1,3) = 5
Fifteenth Place -- 4 Points
early spring —
my three year old tries
mamma's high heels
vishnu kapoor
(0,1,2) = 4
This warming sun.
And how the snow glitters
as it vanishes.
Horst Ludwig
(1,0,1) = 4
early spring
an orange bow saw
hangs in a tree
Keith Heiberg
(0,1,2) = 4
Lightning
jigsaws the dark —
early spring
Marilyn Hazelton
(0,1,2) = 4
cruel early spring —
scattered on frozen snow
a red bird's feathers
jill
(1,0,1) = 4
Sixteenth Place -- 3 Points
crying newborn
calls early spring
into the house
Aalix Roake
(0,1,1) = 3
my grandma
wears a red geranium
early spring again
Don Basilio
(0,1,1) = 3
early spring
a sea breeze rocks
the infant's cradle
Gautam Nadkarni
(0,0,3) = 3
early spring weather
the wreath out on the mail box
sheds its needles
Edward
(0,1,1) = 3
darker ? lighter
an earthworm retreats into
early spring soil
Mark Hollingsworth
(0,1,1) = 3
fading memories
the early spring rain
washes out the snow
Elena Naskova
(0,0,3) = 3
early spring walk
a sunray
from puddle to puddle
Jacek M.
(0,0,3) = 3
early spring
there next to the snow shovels
pots of daffodils
doris kasson
(0,0,3) = 3
early spring —
another 3 inches
to shovel
LGD
(0,0,3) = 3
early spring —
my teenaged daughter's cellphone
never stops ringing
sanjuktaa
(0,1,1) = 3
stacks of firewood
marked half price
early spring
Laureen McHugh
(0,0,3) = 3
early spring —
out of the snow
snowdrops
Betty
(0,0,3) = 3
in the city park
green beer bottles
—early spring
Piotr Mogri
(0,0,3) = 3
a chat with old friends,
early spring snow turns to rain
and then back again
j. blain
(1,0,0) = 3
early spring night
slowly thawing the moon
in silent lake
Boris Nazansky
(0,1,1) = 3
nursing home visit
outside early spring
inside dead of winter
Roberta Beary
(0,0,3) = 3
I read this one as I picked the last page off the printer and thought, "I bet that makes my final list." And so it did.
General Comments:
So many great haiku to choose from!
A refreshingly large number of entries managed to avoid the clichés so easily associated with this kigo.
I just wish i had more than 6 pts to give...there are so many good ones, it's difficult to make up one's mind.
The submissions this month show why I dislike generic kigo like 'early
spring' -- too many poets used an early spring kigo along with the kukai
phrase. That's a technical violation called a 'double kigo.' It would be
much better to let us suggest the phrase by using early spring kigo. That's
how the Free Format kukai worked, and it worked well.