First Place -- 20 points
migrating birds -
the waving field
of narcissus
Israel Lopez Balan
(0,5,10) = 20 pts
A lovely image-(the artist)Escher-like.
Second Place -- 19 pts
narcissus . . .
stars turning
to snow
Francine Banwarth
(0,7,5) = 19 pts
Third Place -- 16 pts
into the water,
into itself:
narcissus
josh wikoff
(2,2,6) = 16 pts
...thought it was a clever "reflection" of the original piece.
I felt whoever wrote it really twisted the kigo word in a unique way...
new snow . . .
her footprints lead
to the narcissus
Susan Constable
(0,4,8) = 16 pts
15 points
first narcissus . . .
the toddler meets
his baby sister
Carole MacRury
(0,4,7) = 15 pts
14 points
caught in the mirror —
the December moon
and white narcissus
Jill
(2,1,6) = 14 pts
13 points
A narcissus
in her black hair…
first snow
Magdalena Dale
(1,1,8) = 13 pts
12 points
second frost
mother and narcissus
burying both
Bill Hudson
(3,0,3) = 12 pts
in her palm
narcissus bulbs
such yearning
Ruth Powell
(0,5,2) = 12 pts
Good haiku use physical images to evoke feelings.
Nice contrast of the open palm and round bulbs; a
yearning for what? spring, growth, love?
bright koi glide
below the narcissus
reflections
Rose Marie Stutts, EdD
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
I like the beautiful visuals, the colors of koi and
narcissus and the allusion (only) to the myth.
bending down
to sniff the narcissus
thinking about himself
Neil Muscott
(0,3,6) = 12 pts
11 points
by the water
narcissus touches
its reflection
Gosia Zamorska
(1,3,2) = 11 pts
10 points
the northern star
and the sun hibernating
in a narcissus
Anne Lind
(1,2,3) = 10 pts
paper narcissus —
morning light shines through
one petal
Marylouise Knight
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
my gift
of forced narcissus . . .
waiting for your smile
Bill Kenney
(0,1,8) = 10 pts
9 points
old photo —
grandmother in the garden
surrounded by narcissus
Ivana Vanja Nikovic
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
lost
in the snowdrift
a narcissus
Vasile Moldovan
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
kindergarten
budding narcissus
line the windowsill
tom painting
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
winter's longest night —
sweet narcissus
keeping her company
Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,7) = 9 pts
8 points
reflected
in the rain puddle
narcissus
Bridget Cougar
(1,1,3) = 8 pts
a wild narcissus!
the lingering excitement
in the echo's voice
Zhanna P. Rader
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
self-portrait:
in the hand of a girl
a white narcissus
Don Basilio
(0,2,4) = 8 pts
reflecting pool
double blooms of narcissus
above the mist
andrea
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
7 points
winter chill . . .
she plants narcissus
in a festive red pot
Carol Raisfeld*
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
in winter darkness
just for the scent of it —
forced narcissus
Mary Lee McClure
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
narcissus in bloom
he tilts his Santa hat
and winks at himself
Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
A fresh playful take on being a little too full of one’s self.
6 points
narcissus
on the catalog’s cover —
my red fingernails
Ami
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
I like the subtle story here: her catalogue is wishful thinking,
her painted nails do not garden.
winter sun —
on fading narcissus
the last rays
Jordi Climent
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
second date
narcissus bulb
germinates
Polona
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
5 points
three weeks later
six narcissus bulbs
still in the sack
soji
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
snow thaw —
first bended narcissus
lifts its head
Tom Maretic
(1,0,2) = 5 pts
lake echoes...
the ecstasy of
a narcissus touch
Rita Odeh
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
ice drops on
the narcissus bloom
the cat sleeping by the fire
Sjs (Stevie)
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
gone like her
the narcissus painting
in the gallery window
john tiong chunghoo
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
narcissus
in yellowed herbarium
just the name
Dorota Pyra
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
nightfall
the persistent yellow
of narcissus blossoms
ed markowski
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
a distant voice...
narcissus bulbs lie
beneath the birdbath
Laurene
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
sunny spell
he buys a narcissus
for himself
Petar Tchouhov
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
rimy windowpane
in the breath of hot tea
painted narcissus
Boris Nazansky
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
bent narcissus —
how many bloom
with faces hidden
George Hawkins
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
4 points
Easter drizzle
the faded narcissuses
raise their heads
Jacek M.
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
on stage
young ballerinas' first dance ~
a narcissus blooms
tish davis
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
My experience also, children dancing ballet can resemble flowers.
between narcissus
and the snow
frost blossoms
Ann K. Schwader
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
metrosexual...
his window, the reflection
of a narcissus
Ed S
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
narcissus
somehow draped
with tinsel
Beth Powell
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
wind blown
making a snow angel
a narcissus
Terra Martin
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
window frost
the white narcissus opens
for Christmas
Irene Golas
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
3 points
another gray day
narcissus bulbs dormant
under mounds of snow
Jeanne Jorgensen
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
mid-day sun
melting the ice
Narcissus weeps
Pris Campbell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
the water mirror
leaves Autumn to Narcissus
—our barren Cedar
Jared Kubokawa, ALT Ehime-ken
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
Broken,
white narcissus —
she never arrives
krin
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
nursery class —
the girl sings to
a narcissus
Charishma Ramchandani
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
narcissus
a bee clambers
into its trumpet
RaV
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
GENERAL COMMENTS:
Narcissi produced some fine poems. They seem so naturally
poetic, so white, so out of season (so to speak), so fragrant.
What a gift, to get to read so many fine & fun haiku - thank you!