First Place -- 42 points
ink brush
so many ways to draw
a plum blossom
Audrey Downey
(3,8,17) = 42 pts
The moment just before the beginning, full of uncertainties and possibilities.
Second Place -- 27 points
into winter ~
the empty plum tree
and I
Paul Hodder
(0,7,13) = 27 pts
I love the stark simplicity of this one.
The plum tree and the haijin coincide, but each
with a hope for future blossom?
Third Place -- 22 points
plum pudding
an old friend warms
a cold night
Jo McInerney
(1,4,11) = 22 pts
21 points
deep winter —
breaking the seal
on a jar of plum jam
tom painting
(1,3,12) = 21 pts
A strong moment. I would have scored it higher if line 1 had been line 3, but that's probably just me.
I like the tension between the "locked in" feeling of deep winter and the breaking of the seal.
Nice evocation of scent without "telling". There
were several last jars of plum jam but this one
captures a sense of how we try to seal ourselves away
from the winter season.
16 points
all that remains
of the tree by my gate
this pickled plum
Barbara Snow
(1,1,11) = 16 pts
13 points
plum branches
in bloom . . .
baby's first kick
Alice Frampton
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
12 points
three year drought
the scream of a chainsaw
in the plum orchard
Edward
(1,2,5) = 12 pts
`Scream' is an evocative word and well-placed here. I'm not sure that the
season is clear as a dead tree can be cut at any time of the year. Still
it's a strong seasonless haiku.
11 points
winter wind
blowing away thoughts
of plum blossom
Jon Baldwin
(2,0,5) = 11 pts
One of those times when season and weather don't
coincide, we've all shared this dashed hope of spring.
window light
the dancing edges
of still-life plums
George Hawkins
(0,4,3) = 11 pts
evening breeze …
plum petals flee
the Buddha's ear
Carol Raisfeld
(0,1,9) = 11 pts
An interesting (if slightly forced) image, as I don't see why the 'ear'
more than any other body part, or in fact what cause to 'flee' the Buddha at
all as they actually would 'sail past' wouldn't they?
10 points
a sparrow flock
settles upon gray limbs--
plum's winter leaves
Sherry Weaver Smith
(1,1,5) = 10 pts
plum kimono
worn bravely against
white mornings
Ruth Powell
(0,4,2) = 10 pts
ice storm:
the builder's plum-line
still in mid
s
w
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g
Ron Moss
(0,3,4) = 10 pts
9 points
plum pudding
on her new Christmas apron
the first purple stain
bre:^)
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
the taste of
sour plum a spring later —
no regrets
Elena Naskova
(1,1,4) = 9 pts
Tells a story which the reader can only guess. I like the bitter-
sweet taste of that story.
dreams dangling
from bare branches
plum blossoms
Judith Gorgone
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
8 points
fruit vendor —
throws a plum
at a stray dog
Kala Ramesh
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
snowed in —
a dob of plum jam
on each pancake
Susan Constable
(1,0,5) = 8 pts
tumbling
in rain
plum blossom
Roberta Beary
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
fresh plums
the way she rubs
the sheen off
RaV
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
snowbound
slowly spreading plum jam
with my father's knife
Petar Tchouhov
(0,3,2) = 8 pts
plum-blossom petals
stippling the silent pond
chilly rain
Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
blossoming plum
baby girl lifts
her skirt to dance
john tiong chunghoo
(0,1,6) = 8 pts
This one rests solidly on the symbolic relationship between blossoms and
human feminine childhood as well on the visual likeness of a blossom to a
skirt.
7 points
droning teacher…
students' eyes focus
on plum blossoms
Nancy Smith
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
this is just to say
the plums in the icebox
are for breakfast
Bill Kenney
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
on her lips
plum-flavored lipstick
… winter evening
Ella Wagemakers
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
That'll take your mind off the cold. Taste the color.
overripe plum —
another phone call
unanswered
Laurene
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
6 points
ice in the plum trees
she's out there
talking to the stars
Francine Banwarth
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
art class —
picking the right plum
for a nipple
ash of moth
(0,2,2) = 6 pts
Art = nature + artifice.
budding plum blossoms
first ikebana arrangement
of the New Year
Nancy Nitrio
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
Though I didn't consider actual plum blossom to be
quite appropriate for this season - according to Bill
Higginson "looking for plum blossom" is the early
spring kigo - this budding branch is especially
brought indoors to force into bloom for a New Year
arrangement. This makes it a rare delight.
branches
bowing low -
the weight of ripe plums
Pia Sosua
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
dusty sunset —
the hawker's wheelbarrow
still full of red plums
Patrick
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
last jar
of mother's plum jelly
morning snow
Ann K. Schwader
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
5 points
old garden
with flowering plum tree …
scent of spring
Jacek M.
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
dried plums
I rest with a hand
on my belly
Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
plum sauce —
the last eggroll
shared
Mike Montreuil
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
the plum's curve
fits my palm —
her chilling words
Michael Dylan Welch
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
The thought of a plum to throw is so strong for me here I wish that L3 were
first to give it a logically linear thrust. Even though cause and effect
are not to be sought or explained in haiku, I feel they can sometimes be
used to advantage.
4 points
picking plums
her dress
the very same shade
kawazu
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
my dog's nose
glows in the dark —
into that plum jam again!
Pris Campbell
(1,0,1) = 4 pts
plum pudding
the cosiness
of my unborn child
Katrina Shepherd
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
ray of light
through plum wine
stained glass
me
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
side by side
two plums, one bitter
one sweet
Neil Muscott
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
in spite of its name
the old plum tree not nearly
vertical
Paul O. Williams
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
I like the ingenuity of this one but think it would be better to break L2
after 'tree'.
forgotten Christmas lights
plum tree branches
continue to shine
Harvey Jenkins
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
beautiful neighbor
a taste of ripe plums
in her orchard
Norsto
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
3 points
for the new owner
bearing fruit for the first time
my little plum tree
marlène Buitelaar
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
snow day —
there's the plum tree
at the bus stop
Ami
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
winter plum
under its branches
she stands tall
Beth Powell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
granny passed away
mold on plum jam surface
reflects moonlight
Boris Nazansky
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
December beach
the last bits of flesh
from a plum stone
paul m.
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
tiny plum buds
on leafless stems
lost in heavy freeze
Jim Applegate
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
winterstorm —
the place of a plum stone
under the snow
Li Ree
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
plum wine
our guests order
a third
citygirl
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
village in the hills…
the vendor gives me
a plum to taste
K. Ramesh
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
From this one moment I can imagine the whole travel experience
myself. Well done!
plums fall
from the tree …
purple rain
Mary Davila
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
new plum-brandy —
the host doesn't reveal
all his secrets
Tom Maretic
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
making plum jam —
two stems and a leaf are
well cooked too
Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
This is sweet in its specificity.
I like it when the poet can bring humor to the piece without
straying into senryu territory.
Comments in general:
discovering
among the plums
William's poem
So many good ones to choose from this month!