First Place — Thirty-four Points
graduation day
her mother and I
test our civility
tom painting
(3,7,11) = 34 pts
The interconnected different aspects of life are merged in the common events of everyday life; graduating from school and commencing on new life relationships. Two wonderful occasion merged.
Second Place — Twenty Points
graduation cheer
a flock of starlings
takes the sky
Terry O'Connor
(1,2,13) = 20 pts
I like the implied image of the students taking flight, en masse, as well as the starlings. Nice play on 'starlings', too.
Third Place — Nineteen Points
graduation day
dandelion seeds
on the wind
frederick c gier
(0,4,11) = 19 pts
Like the dandelions, the graduates will undoubtedly travel far from their common starting point. Of course, we'll hope that they bring more joy and value to the world than dandelions do!
Fourth Place—Seventeen Points
graduation day—
their daughter's name
mispronounced
Bill Kenney
(0,4,9) = 17 pts
Fifth Place—Fifteen Points
graduation day
dogs present handlers
for diplomas
Rose Marie Stutts
(1,5,2) = 15 pts
graduation day
mom and stepmom
sitting side by side
Renee Owen
(1,2,8) = 15 pts
Sixth Place—Fourteen Points
graduation—
spiked heels sinking
into the grass
Penny Harter
(1,2,7) = 14 pts
A picture that speaks to almost all my senses — a clear
favourite of mine here! This haiku shows keen observation.
Talk about being brought down to earth!
graduation photo
half a century later
her eyes unchanged
Meredith Cavalieri
(0,5,4) = 14 pts
Seventh Place—Thirteen Points
graduation day...
dogs of various sizes
sit and stay
Elinor Pihl Huggett
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
Eighth Place—Eleven Points
a newborn
asleep at the breast—
graduation day
Ron Moss
(0,3,5) = 11 pts
fallen birch leaves
in the graduation photo
we all look the same
Beverley George
(0,2,7) = 11 pts
L2 provides a natural pivot and the last line is amusing, yet carries the ring of truth.
Ninth Place—Ten Points
country school bleachers
the scent of alfalfa
at graduation
soji
(0,4,2) = 10 pts
Tenth Place—Nine Points
at graduation
all the flowers
in full bloom
Ben Gieske
(1,0,6) = 9 pts
Eleventh Place—Eight Points
caterpillar
taking its graduation—
high-grade butterfly
Virginia Popescu
(2,0,2) = 8 pts
graduation
remembering her first steps
magna cum laude
Horst Ludwig
(0,4,0) = 8 pts
Twelfth Place—Seven Points
graduation
the spaghetti strap
slips off her shoulder
Beth Powell
(1,2,0) = 7 pts
I remember how the spaghetti strap slipped off her shoulder, not quite a half-century ago.
One of those moments that are absolutely trivial, unless you happen to be the one involved. There is nothing unkind in the humor here.
graduation day
wild roses
ablossom
Alan S. Bridges
(1,1,2) = 7 pts
graduation . . .
the speaker's wisdom
blown away
Bill Pauly
(0,3,1) = 7 pts
Graduation—
students and their tassels
seeking direction
Shelley Krause
(0,2,3) = 7 pts
Pick of the litter.
graduation day
the valedictorian's
ragged running shoes
ed markowski
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
Graduation Day—
mother picks off
a dandelion parachute
Ralf Broker
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
baby bird
spreads her wings...
graduation day
A. Dharma Bum
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
graduation . . .
the valedictorian shares
her lip gloss
Francine Banwarth
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
The feminine pronoun is, happily, no longer unexpected, but the "lip gloss" is a nice twist.
stuck in the
revolving doors
graduation day
Elena Naskova
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
peonies
bloom overnight—
graduation
Marylouise Knight
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
Simple, yet effective . . . the graduates blooming as they complete their program. Let's hope their bloom time, however, lasts longer than the peonies'!
kindergarten graduation
the empty bird's nest
above the doorway
Sjs Stevie
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
Thirteenth Place—Six Points
Graduation time
little bird shows its parents—
how well it observed
Jenn McSweeney
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
the transgender boy
flips her tassel right to left—
graduation morning
Bruce H. Feingold
(1,1,1) = 6 pts
graduation—
nothing beneath
his gown
Lex Joy
(1,0,3) = 6 pts
graduation day,
our daughter somebody else's
brown-eyed girl
Robert Ertman
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
This haiku tells readers immediately multiple meanings of graduation—a true commencement is recognized here. The voices of the haiku tell readers that the students, the parents and the future off-spring of the graduating couple are totally involved in on-going and developing relationships. What a positive expression of live is revealed in these powerful images. Great tenderness emanates from the haiku.
graduation day ::
catalpa blossoms
litter the lawn
timothy russell
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
red wings
for the caterpillar . . .
graduation day
Mary Davila
(0,1,4) = 6 pts
beneath the class clown's
graduation robe—
purple sneakers
Terri L. French
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
Fourteenth Place—Five Points
graduation
now the world
is school
Bill Gottlieb
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
sleeping
after graduation—
dreams of cotton in the wind
Bhalachandra
(0,2,1) = 5 pts
graduation –
the toast of champagne
for a hawker’s son
Gautam Nadkarni
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
A subtle haiku that makes a point, without being preachy.
graduation day—
flaunting
her diamond ring
Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
a peace dove
soils the soldier's cap
at graduation
Barbara A Taylor
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
graduation day
the long awaited peonies
making a statement
Audrey Downey
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
graduation day
removing the training wheels
from her bicycle
Tom Genovese
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
tough graduation
the swallow's first flight
and the air is full of hats
Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
only eighteen . . .
her graduation photo
in front of the altar
Susan Constable
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
a degree of mischief
in the black squirrel's stare
graduation day
Jennifer Corpe
(0,0,5) = 5 pts
Fifteenth Place—Four Points
parting messages
through the microphone
graduation day
gillena
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
last cherry blossom
my graduation photo
shows a weary smile
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
fallen mortarboard
a cygnet tilts its head
at the yellow tassel
Nancy Smith
(0,1,2) = 4 pts
damp eyed
through graduation—
hay fever
andrea
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
graduation—
he adjusts again
the sails
Nelson
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
So many images are forward looking—the ideal of graduation and setting sails for a course are wonderfully compatible; this haiku is forward looking and innovative.
graduation day—
over his gown a Maori
wears a feathered cloak
Patricia Prime (NZ)
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
In this haiku two ancient cultures collide—the aboriginal Maori of civilization of New Zealand and the medieval university system of Europe are meshed images; the irony of juxtaposition makes many apt social comparisons.
graduation dance
the school principal starts
a conga line
Garry Eaton
(0,0,4) = 4 pts
Sixteenth Place—Three Points
first day of college
admiring the caps and gowns
the new graduates
bre
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
thinking caps in flight
jubilant graduates cheer
high expectations
Lorraine Marguerite Gasrel Black
(1,0,0) = 3 pts
mortarboards
on the college roof
graduation day
Andre Surridge
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
into the future
in medieval cap and gown
graduation
Elaine Riddell
(0,1,1) = 3 pts
hat toss celebration—
a dragonfly caught
at a graduation ceremony
Daniela Bullas
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
graduation day...
our daughter's scent
still in my memory
_kala
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
graduation day –
remembering only
smiles and tears
Tomislav M.
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
salmon run
old schoolmates return
for graduation
Darrell
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
An apt juxtaposition.
General Comments:
I preferred those that found something fresh in the most familiar meaning of "graduation" to those that sought clever ways to avoid it.
Once again I don't feel this topic was very evocative. It would have been somewhat better if calling for 'anything suggesting graduation' rather than the exact use of that word. Exact words always make for soporific reading during the voting phase.
Once again it was really hard for me to pick them and I wish I could have been able to pick more to win.
I went back to studying after 20 years and I’m graduating in two weeks - our winter here in South Africa - so this topic is very apt!