First Place Thirty-nine Points
firefly
- the night
finds its way in
miriam chaikin
(1,11,14) = 39 Pts
Simple . . . and so beautiful. Wish I were there.
Second Place Twenty-four Points
first firefly
the electrician shuts
his toolbox
ed markowski
(1,5,11) = 24 Pts
A delightful association between the firefly and the electrician.
I like how "first firefly" gives clue to this person's
awakening to the season but I snagged on the author's choice
of "electrician". I doubt it was intentional but feels
deliberate and clever.
Third Place Twenty Points
mind empty
a firefly
fills it
Francine Banwarth
(1,5,7) = 20 Pts
Fourth Place Seventeen Points
firefly
my attention span
shortens
tom painting
(1,3,8) = 17 Pts
The short attention span vindicated! Mind and firefly are one.
Fifth Place Fifteen Points
dusk...
through my fingers
fireflies
Carol Pearce-Worthington
(0,5,5) = 15 Pts
This is very pleasant, as if in summer time too may be allowed to
slip though our fingers, perhaps also the safety in which the
relaxation of sleep may come.
Sixth Place Fourteen Points
above the fire
a lonely firefly
follows the spark
Jacek M.
(1,3,5) = 14 Pts
It reads as a sentence so would normally not get my vote, but it's
realistic.
porch swing
fireflies rise
above the oaks
Carmen Sterba
(0,5,4) = 14 Pts
Seventh Place Thirteen Points
tonight only
fireflies
and the moon
Garry Eaton
(1,3,4) = 13 Pts
fireflies
now and then
the memories
AD
(1,3,4) = 13 Pts
A very effective pivot, with a lovely link between the physical and
mental.
creaking oars
the fireflies
echo the stars
Tore Sverredal
(1,2,6) = 13 Pts
Got my vote, though would be improved by dropping the first "the".
after the funeral ...
a lone firefly, blinking
quietly blinking
Carol Raisfeld
(0,4,5) = 13 Pts
Eighth Place Twelve Points
fireflies
a worn path
to the outhouse
Carmel Lively Westerman
(1,1,7) = 12 Pts
This one mixes 'high' and 'low.' Basho would approve.
Very funny mix of high and low, and fireflies would be in the damp
spot, so quite truthful.
so plain
in the morning light
~ firefly
Paul Hodder
(0,4,4) = 12 Pts
It's refreshing to read a firefly haiku that shows us the contrast
between day and night. Thank you!
Perhaps Issa's perspective.
Ninth Place Eleven Points
falling stars
the forest fills
with fireflies
Nancy Smith
(0,3,5) = 11 Pts
its light showing
the edge of one leaf
firefly
Ella Wagemakers
(0,2,7) = 11 Pts
Tenth Place Ten Points
fireflies courting
it's an on and off
relationship
Nancy Nitrio
(0,1,8) = 10 Pts
Dawn
my firefly turns into
a beetle
Gosia Zamorska
(0,3,4) = 10 Pts
Torn between the two with this theme, but they say different things
about life, so I vote for both!
Eleventh Place Nine Points
firefly jar
her sleeping bag close to
her sister's
Ruth Powell
(1,2,2) = 9 Pts
I love the perfection of this captured moment, with neither the
sisters nor the fireflies there except by implication.
Twelfth Place Eighth Points
tiny sparks of light
flit about my dark garden
fireflies or fairies?
Ignatius
(0,3,2) = 8 Pts
Thirteenth Place Seven Points
fireflies
someone wrote haiku
in their light
Horst Ludwig
(1,1,2) = 7 Pts
firefly
at your gravesite
my watch stopped
ARW
(0,3,1) = 7 Pts
firefly
hunt -
almost there
then
the light
goes out
Laurene
(0,3,1) = 7 Pts
Perfect would perhaps be no 'out' but just "___"
one firefly, two
the small lap-lapping
as we drift from shore
Lin Geary
0,2,3 = 7 Pts
helpless laughter...
the Ferris wheel dips us
into the fireflies
jt
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts
fireflies
light my path
to the full moon
php
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts
losing then finding
that first thought
firefly
Joyce Clement
(0,1,5) = 7 Pts
Fourteenth Place Six Points
a field of fairy tales
the many lights of
fireflies
bre
(1,0,3) = 6 Pts
A standout for economy and mindfulness.
like this firefly
in this dark night...
my life
Li Ree
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts
firefly haze
in the rearview mirror
the drive back home
sanjuktaa
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts
>To me this suggests the glow of a safe childhood, 'home' as sanctuary.
starlight reception . . .
the ring bearer brings
the bride a firefly
Bill Pauly
(0,1,4) = 6 Pts
Fifteenth Place Five Points
spotting a firefly,
the tiny ant stops and mulls...
what's wrong with the sun?
Abhinav Maurya
(1,1,0) = 5 Pts
the world a jar
firefly through
my door
mechaieh
(1,0,2) = 5 Pts
I love the way this turns things inside out in so many ways!
summer evening
the random flash
of fireflies
Mary Lee McClure
(1,0,2) = 5 Pts
the firefly and i wait for the sunset
w. f. owen
(1,0,2) = 5 Pts
starless night
i let the firefly
guide me
Wojciech Wojnar
(0,2,1) = 5 Pts
the baby asleep
a reflection of fireflies
in the water
P M F Johnson
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts
in tall grass
we chase the fireflies
seven sisters
Bethel
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts
I'm always charmed to see an astronomy kigo.
home village
above the deep well
a firefly
Lech Szeglowski
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts
Sixteenth Place Four Points
Firefly has gone
Silver lining of the cloud
Lit up by his soul.
Tanja
(1,0,1) = 4 Pts
Midnight storm;
Where did they suddenly go?
Fireflies and the moon
manoj saranathan
(1,0,1) = 4 Pts
A contemplative question that sparks many thoughts.
firefly on her hand
the cold glow of
young widow's ring
Dorota Pyra
(0,2,0) = 4 Pts
after the rain...
trees filled with fireflies
Christmas in July!
Rose Marie Stutts
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
mother flashes the porch light
in my cupped hands
a firefly's tickle
aom (tim)
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
Fireflies
a smear of phosphorescence
on the toddler's palm
Linda Papanicolaou
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
Firefly
lantern home for
nameless dog
Kurt R. W.
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
wondering
about my ancestors
fireflies
max verhart
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
wheat field
parade of fireflies
at dusk
Cindy Bene
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts
wedding march
the flower girl
chasing fireflies
Melissa Spurr
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts
Something about the magical firefly that lures us away from 'duty'.
Seventeenth Place Three Points
the tot
mesmerized
fireflies
Zhanna P. Rader
(1,0,0) = 3 Pts
Fourth of July
oh, firefly
how can you compete?
Barbara Campitelli
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
The firefly
Alights on my sleeve
Ignoring me
James Sawers
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
scent of sandalwood
a firefly adds to
the light of incense
gillena
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
her face
beyond the fireflies
moving light
Jo McInerney
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
silent fireflies
in her throat a burning taste
of loneliness
Elena Naskova
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
tree house nightlight
the small boy sneaks one more firefly
into the jar
Edward
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
children shouting
"look, there's one!"
the sound of fireflies
Shelley Krause
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
Perseids
I recall summer
fireflies
Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
In the dog days of summer, to recall early summer nights
when the heat was still welcomed and all of summer was
ahead...nicely done.
holding flashlights
they twirl in the darkness
pretend fireflies
Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
favorite uncle
we trade fireflies
for sparklers
John Thompson
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
restless mind
fireflies strobing
all over the meadow
Earl Keener
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
rain drips
more slowly from the porch
fireflies reappear
April Serock
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
sun rose late this day
little time to learn so much
life of a firefly
1bodhisattva
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts
sudden blackout
the old neighbourhood
full of fireflies
Israel Lopez Balan
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
power outage ::
a firefly's slow progress
across the window
timothy russell
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
broken curfew
she tries to blame
the fireflies
Susan Constable
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
hot night
the afterglow
of a dead firefly
Collin Barber
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
flash of shoes
children hunting
for fireflies
Jim Applegate
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
absent minded
following the flight
of the firefly
Jon Baldwin
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
firefly hunt galaxies in a jar
John Stone
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts
General Comments:
This was much more difficult than writing my entries! I ended up
creating three lists pruning down my favorites! And I sorely wish I
could vote for the ones I left out.
Fireflies produced many evocative responses. Good poems.
It's something of a surprise that this magical (though traditional)
topic seems to have produced relatively few good haiku. I wonder if
participants were a bit haunted by the hundreds of years of haiku
already written; perhaps such a weight may have inhibited
imaginations.